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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #lives #change
Some
people
 choose a peaceful
life
 that they can spend their time doing the usual
things
 and not taking any risks, but others argue that
change
 is a good way to enjoy
the
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life
. In my opinion, stepping out of the comfort zone is a good way to find out the meaning of
life
. On the one hand, many youngsters choose a normal
life
 that doing the same activities every day because they feel safer in their zone. They have sufficient
things
 that adapt their living standard, so they do not need to compete or
try hard
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.
For example
, my close friend, she has a
bacic
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basic
 salary to live in the city and already own a flat, so she feels
statisfied
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satisfied
 with her conditions and maintains the route
life
 day by day.
Moreover
, some
people
 fear
of
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the
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failure. They are scared of losing their reputation or money for any risks, and they do not want others
laugh
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 at their actions.
On the contrary
, many crowds accept the
change
 as they would like to challenge themselves. These
people
 desire to learn experiences from the challenges know more about their
ability
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abilities
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.
For instance
, a
collegue
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colleague
college
 in my workplace,
he
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has a can-do attitude in his work, the man often conquers the challenges and admits the failures in each
projects
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, he would like to upgrade himself and gain the good result. And another reason is to seek the miracle opportunity in
life
 to
change
 the world.
People
understands
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 that
changing
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change
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 play a vital role in the
developmet
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development
 of mankind. Accepting the unusual
things
 that allow
to explore
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 the potential of someone or
researchs
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research
 to brings the better
life
 on the Earth. In
conclude
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, the
change
 helps us to keep trying continuously
everyday
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 that brings
the
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value for individuals and society
,
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 but do not give up the new
things
 in daily
life
 because of fear or stable
life
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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