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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving older railway lines.

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Some people express their ideas about building new fast
train
 tracks within the main town would be a perfect concept, if it is cost more
money
. Other people to
think
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 spend that much
money
 on present
train
 tracks and buses would be the best option to implement. In
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topic I am going to present my personal thought with some examples.
First
 of all, most of the countries around the world use
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the train
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train
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 as the main transportation
system
 to commute. Some believed that building new high-speed
train
 way lines within cities would be a waste of
money
.
Moreover
, they think that
money
 can upgrade the current
system
 or high ways and bus
system
. According to their perspectives, new trains can add to the
system
 by repairing old ones, improving the facilities in the stations and passenger trains. The authorities can reshape the tracks with fewer bends in them, which will increase the speed of the
train
 slightly.
On the other hand
, part of the community, including the younger generation to
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 develop new speed railway tracks would be a great decision. That will improve the passenger’s lifestyle and save time to spend their own thinks. The new transportation
system
 would have much more advantages compared to the old one.
Such
 as the bullet trains, which is a maximum speed of around 600KM per hour. Upgrading the current transportation
system
 would not provide benefits to the community.
However
, the older
system
 would not be compatible with the new one.
Therefore
, it might need to convert into a hybrid
system
, which is in between the process. In my point of view, I would agree to develop a new speed
train
system
 rather than improve the current method.
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  • Infrastructure
  • Modernization
  • Efficiency
  • Congestion
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Preservation
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  • Reliability
  • State-of-the-art
  • Futuristic design
  • Rural connectivity
  • Maintenance
  • Legacy systems
  • Strategic investment
  • Feasibility study
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