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Most people believe that stricter punishment should be given for traffic offences. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Hi Emma, I hope you’re doing well! I’m just writing to let you know that I’ve received your letter yesterday. I feel so sorry to hear that you have a problem with your current job.
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 me tell you
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! For my work
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 year, I had the same problem
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 you. As
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 week is your three-month trial period, I understand your feeling because you need to have another training which
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 you to feel depressed and stressed. When I started working my
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 job, I got much pressure about dealing with customers. The thing is I need to work overtime until late
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 brings me lacking
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energy every day.
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, I used to receive bad feedback from my manager due to less experience in sales. My advice is you shouldn’t work alone. If you have some questions, you can ask your boss or colleagues.
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, you will easily feel down. If you think they give you too much training, please tell them about your expression. Don’t keep it in your mind! I hope my suggestion will be useful for you. Just let me know if you need anything on my end. Best wishes, Mookie

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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