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Throughout history, male leaders always lead us to violence and conflict. If a society is governed by female leaders, it will be more peaceful. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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history provides a unique learning experience for us and we can learn from
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 mistakes because history repeats itself. People have different views about male and female
leaders
 and most of them believe that male
leaders
 have taken individuals into violence and conflict. I believe that it is an acceptable theory about them.
First
 of all, from a scientific point of view,
women
’s
brain
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 can get a lot of data and organize them at the same time in
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 they are able to use their brain more effectively in compared with
men
 even it works during the night when they fall in asleep so they are not unconscious ever. Due to the
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women
 have an analytical mind,
moreover
, according to historical
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women
 have a natural talent to be more political and diplomat for doing their duties and tasks so they are more likely to consider all aspects of the issue to make a better decision with their mind and hurt and, in turn, they can predict others
next
 step and it plays a crucial role in their life and success.
Secondly
,
Men
leaders
 most of the time have been interested in expanding their countries and
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 because by creating too much violence and conflict they want to be a hero and
this
 situation is compounded when they overlook people’s safety and security in search of their ambition
that is
men
 leader’s goals and dreams override the importance of the general population ‘s destiny.
For example
, Hillary Clinton has been president of Germany since 15 years ago and during her age, Germany is changed to the economic
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 of Europe with a high standard of living. For
instant
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, all young people who live there can benefit from free education and get more job opportunities. Apart from that, the biggest highlighting factor about
this
 country is that all of the rights between
men
 and
women
 are equal.
As a result
, it shows
women
’s power, ability, and skills.
Finally
, in some families in Iran which lose their father, for
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, maybe family runs into financial issues but mothers support and manage their family and do not allow it to burst. It is a simple example on a small scale but we can involve it
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 scale as we know in the world we have numerous single
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 and most people think they are compelled to raise their child, but they have more sense of responsibility regard to their children and all the time try to provide them with the better situation and it requires too much effort and dedication. Based on all of the reasons I mentioned,
women
leaders
 are more sensitive and concern about the young generation’s future because they are familiar with upbringing a child and its difficulties so they try to create a comfortable and safe circumstance for their citizens. Due to the reasons mentioned above, I believe that
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society
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 governed by
women
 is
more safe
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 and peacefully as they have an analytical mind and the sense of being a mother has a significant positive effect on managing the country
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