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With the growth in low-cost passenger flights, often to holiday destinations, air traffic is increasingly leading to more noise, pollution, and airport construction. Some people say that governments should try to reduce air traffic by taxing it more heavily. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
 are convinced that due to
air
 contamination, noise pollution and airport construction which are in results of a raise in cheap-travel
flights
, the governments should appoint a higher excise on
flights
 in order to diminish these problems. In my point of view, imposing higher tax on
flights
 is not a sensible decision, because
air planes
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aeroplanes
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 are the safest and in long distances, are the fastest way of transportation.
Also
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 it only leads to more expensive tickets that
people
 should pay
.
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for.
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Moreover
, the popularity that
air
travels
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travel
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has
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have
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 gained, cannot be easily reduced and
people
 will still employ
air planes
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aeroplanes
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.
Furthermore
, with the increase in the cost of tickets and taxes, the number of flight passengers will decline, which may lead to financial trouble and even bankruptcy of
flights
 companies. Despite the positive possible consequences of imposing higher tax on
flights
, the reverse opinion is more believable for me, because the tourism industry is Mostly dependent on
flights
 and the cheaper the
flights
 to a country is, the more tourists will be attracted to;
tourism
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the tourism
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 industry is a significant source of income for numerous countries, so if the governments increase the price of tickets, the damage will be only reflected on themselves. To conclude, in spite many are believed that taxing
flights
 more heavily will have great effects on
air
 and noise pollution, it is still obvious that the demerits of the increase in the tax of
flights
is
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 more considerable as it affects
tourism
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the tourism
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 industry and
people
 financial situation.
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