Some people think that it would be better for large companies and industry to move to regional areas outside urban centres. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Economics can be considered
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an important factor
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people’s lives. Leading to
this
argument, many entrepreneurs nowadays plan to settle workplaces or factories from urban
areas
to the outside urban
areas
instead
. In my opinion, even though moving to the rural
areas
may reduce the company costs and expand job capacity, it would be harmful to the
environment
and the communities. Many companies have considered that setting outside the city’s
areas
may be helpful for the companies’ finance reduction. Due to the fact that retention, transportation, and living cost in the
center
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areas
are pricey, rural
areas
might be a better choice for getting the bigger area’s size and having a lower cost.
Moreover
, it would be advantageous
also
for the originating community.
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this
can be seen as a great opportunity for rural people to get a job.
Thus
, not only moving out from the city decreases the business cost, but
also
increases job capacity for the community.
However
, constructing the offices, factories, and industries would result in a large effect on the
environment
. It is indeed that the transportation may only be convenient while travelling in the city.
This
means that the transportation system is limited so that the company’s owner would decide to build not only the workplace
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but
also
accommodations for workers.
Therefore
,
this
action would harm both the surrounding zone and animals’ habitats.
For example
, many of the northern provinces of Thailand used to be green
areas
full of animals, but after the booming of industries, these animals today could be considered
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extinct animals with dry grounds.
Therefore
, it could be seen from many happened examples that the effect of how the business comes
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to the
environment
According to both arguments on the positive and negative sides of moving companies to outside urban centres, I strongly disagree with the opinion as its impacts should not be ignored. It would be better to manage the area into a specific zone of
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purpose, so the economy and
environment
could be together without any harm.
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