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summarise the information be selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

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The tables illustrate
an
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the
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amount
 of fair-trade coffee and bananas in five countries, including
UK
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the UK
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, Switzerland, Denmark, Belgium and Sweden in between 1999 and 2004. The figure is given in
million
euros
. Overall,
low-level
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 coffee sale was increasing all in the
next
 year.
On the other hand
, the bananas fair-trade were spent less the previous years in some countries. Apparently, the
first
 table shows that Switzerland was the top spender with 3
million
euros
 in 1999. Later in 2004
the
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it was changed to be the UK who spent 20
million
euros
 which
is
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are
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highest
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amount
 in both two years and significantly rose from previous year from 1.5
million
euros
.
Moreover
, in two places sales increased by the same tiny
amount
 by 1.8-2
million
euros
 in Denmark and 0.8-1
million
euros
 in Sweden. From the
next
 table, bananas were mostly purchased by Switzerland in both 1999 and 2004 which is 15 and 47
million
euros
 respectively. Whereas, sales
amount
 in Sweden and Denmark were slightly dropped from 1.8-1
million
euros
 and 2-0.9
million
euros
.
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