Someone says that job satisfaction is more important than job security, but others disagree. Discuss both views and address which one do you agree.

People have different views about whether a satisfactory
job
is prior to its stability. As far as I am concerned, I advocate that security should be given priority. Some people believe that a satisfactory
job
should be valued over security.
Firstly
, working on an area that someone is passionate about raises working productivity, especially for the young generations. Satisfied
workers
possess higher working
motivation
, which is an indispensable aspect of efficient working. The automatic concentration under the
motivation
and the prompt of own interest may
finally
result in the quality of work and the increase in productivity.
Moreover
, being occupied in a satisfactory but less stable
job
requires the adventurous spirit and ambition of young people. Compared with a stable
job
that lacks the
motivation
of making
further
progress, younger
workers
who dare to take risks and are keen on exploration may achieve greater success.
On the other hand
, for
workers
whose main purpose of working is to support their family, they may think highly of the stability of a working position.
Firstly
, the stable financial support that a secure
job
brings is an essential material guarantee for family life, which provides the whole family with quality health care, or enables children to enjoy a higher level of education. Compared with a
job
of passion that may not makes ends meet, a stable position is suitable for
workers
with dependents.
Additionally
, the sense of stability that a permanent
job
brings alleviates people’s psychological burden, especially for those with heavy family responsibilities. If they just pursue the satisfaction or interestingness of the
job
duties, they may lose the stable source of income, which may deteriorate the current situation. In conclusion, a satisfactory
job
is suitable for young generations with greater working
motivation
and ambition, while a stable position that offers constant wages and mental comfort suits
family-based
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