the charts below show information about honey-bee colonies and honey production in the US
The charts give information about the number of
honey
-bee colonies
and the amount
of honey
production
in the US between 1970 and 2010.
In general, in 1980, the number of honey
-bee colonies
were
the highest number Change the verb form
was
the
during Correct article usage
apply
this
priod
.
Correct your spelling
period
On the other hand
, the largest amount
of honey
production
were
in 1976, Change the verb form
was
Overall
, in 2010, the colonies
and honey
had the lowest rates.
From 1970 to 1980 the colonies
rose and they reached just up 4 millions
. After 1980, the numbers went down each year till 2010. Change to singular
million
According
the chart, in 2010, there were just under 2 Add the preposition
toAccording
millions
.
The Change to singular
million
amount
of honey
production
fell to 110000 tonnes from 1970 to 1980. However
, the colonies
decreased during the same priod
. Afterwards, Correct your spelling
period
this
amount
increased to 120000 tonnes in 1990.
Between 1990 and 2010, honey
production
dropped each year in 2010 it was the
less Correct article usage
apply
amount
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