People doing dangerous sporting activities likescuba-diving and bungee-jumping should be responsible for their own safety. Rescue workers should not risk their lives to save people doing those sports. Do you agree ordisagree?
A lot of people loved to do challenging and thrilling sport nowadays even
its
dangerous. Correct your spelling
it's
This
essay will argue that rescue
workers are not responsible to
their lives just in case they needed help. I completely disagree Change preposition
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to
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with
this
statement above.
First
of all, rescue
workers must help others because regarding on
their name "Change preposition
apply
rescue
" meaning they should be there if you needed them. However
, scuba-diving must have
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must-have
companion
especially if you are Correct article usage
a companion
newbie
. Add an article
a newbie
For example
, my cousin loves the ocean and wanted to try scuba-diving but first
, she also
need to do training and must know the steps on how to do it, but since it will be her first
time she will be with someone who is trained on doing scuba-diving to company her at the end of the day to make sure of her safety.
On the other hand
, bungee-jumping is one of the dangerous activities
I've known, because of that, you need to jump up to down and its
very high. Correct your spelling
it's
Additionally
, you must really need a rescue
worker Correct your spelling
stands
standy
downstairs if got Change preposition
to standy
problem
. For Add an article
a problem
instances
, my friend Princess recently tried Fix the agreement mistake
instance
this
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this activity
these activities
activities
and I saw her videos jumping on a very high spot, but she mentioned that a lot of rescue
workers was there to help if needed and its
really a must for me though I have not Correct your spelling
it's
try
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tried
this
before.
To conclude, dangerous activities
like scuba-diving and bungee-jumping must have a rescue
worker because saving lives is a must. Finally
, their
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they're
they are
responsible
for their own safety we should Replace the word
responsibility
double check
their safety so a lot of people will try Add a hyphen
double-check
this
Change the determiner
this activity
these activities
activities
even its
dangerous.Replace the word
it's
it is
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