Some people today believe that the world’s increase in population is unsustainable and will eventually lead to a global crisis. Other people believe that world population increase is necessary and beneficial as it creates the growth of the world’s economy and society.

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Population
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has increased day by day in
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which creates lots of issues for
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. Some believed that overpopulation damage the bio-cycle of
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while,
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tend to deem that it is beneficial in economic prospects. In
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I will discuss both views and give my opinion in conclusion. On the one hand,
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of
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agree that increasing
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population
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is unnecessary which lead
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hazardous problem. What I mean
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it can affect the environment. If
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flooded with
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so it may be brought excessive demand
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food and natural resources which are limited.
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biodiversity of eco-cycles and
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for
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many detrimental problems like deforestation, land destruction and many others.
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, perpetually growth in
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increase the unemployment rate among
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.
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, African countries are suffering from
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overpopulation
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population
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cause unemployment and poverty among
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.
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,
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growth is
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beneficial
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if we look at it from some aspects. Overcrowding may produce extreme requirements of goods, education, accommodation and
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many others. Due to that government will have to
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many new businesses which bring enormous economic benefits.
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,
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might be invested money in their child’s development and future.
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, India is the
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second highest
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country in
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around 1.30 billion so
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of India built more and more education and accommodation facilities which helps it in
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. All in all, I believe that
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in
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has
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a detrimental
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effect on society as well as on
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. So to tackle it government should take some measures.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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