Some people think women should be allowed to join the army, the navy and the air force just like men. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, It is frequently argued that

women

can join

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the

army

as well as

men

. In

this

essay, I will discuss the statement and

then

I will explain why I strongly agree with the sentence.

Firstly

, I believe that

women

can do everything they want and for

this

reason

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they can

also

join the

army

,even if it is generally said that

these kind

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of jobs are reserved for

men

due to the fact that they can be stronger in special

aspect

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aspects

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during the work.

For example

, thinking about the

army

,

men

are more suitable for

bring

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heavy guns thanks to

phisical

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physical

features of

body

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. In

contraddiction

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contradiction

, I think that

women

are

also

suitable as

men

for doing particular jobs, like

soldier

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a soldier

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, and for

this

reason

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they can join

to

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to

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army

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the army

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if they want. The fact is provided by the number of

women

soldier

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soldiers

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who made

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a career

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career

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careers

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and

cover

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high

position

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in the

army

.

Although

some people think that

gilrs

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girls

should not join the

army

or other forces, I believe that they can do whatever they want, in light

on

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the fact that they can provide information according to a different point of view and,

in addition

, they can be extremely

usefull

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useful

because they have

a

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great leadership skills that sometimes it is missed in

men

. In conclusion, I think that

women

are suitable for

army

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the army

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and for

particular

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a particular

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job

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jobs

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, even if some people argued that

soldier’s

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a soldier’s

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career is reserved only for

men

,

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because they can help and contribute as well as

men

.