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The best way to help underachieving pupils is to have compulsory after school activities which they must attend. This way they will become more involved in school and their grades will improve. To what extent do you agree?

#pupils #school #activities #grades
It is often considered that
,
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 mandatory class attendance is necessary after
school
 activities for underachieving
students
 to make them more involved in their
school
 works and to achieve better grades. I completely agree that attending extra
classes
 after
school
 should be compulsory because it will help
students
 to get
extra
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 attention
of
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 their tutors and they will grow
interest
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 in their studies.
Firstly
, attending
classes
 after
school
 will give the underachieving pupils a chance to get
special
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 attention of their teachers and to communicate with them. In regular
classes
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 there are many
students
 and it is often not possible for a teacher to give full concentration
on
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 every
students
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.
Thus
, some
students
 who are a bit
slow
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 than others fall back and they do not come forward in the class for their teacher’s help because of shyness.
Therefore
, extra
classes
 give the opportunity to both
teacher
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teachers
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 and poor
students
 to communicate and overcome their problems. A
student
 can ask the teacher any questions without any hesitation and overcome his weakness.
This
 will help all the weak
students
 to become confident about themselves and encourage them to involve in more
school
 activities.
Secondly
, by attending additional
classes
 underachieving
students
 will get more chances to practice their
school
 tasks which will clear their concepts and will grow
interests
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interest
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 in those specific topics. As it is said that, practice makes a man perfect, it
is
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also
 goes for the weak
students
 as well. By
practicing
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 a topic
that is
 hard
to
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 a
student
 will help him to understand it and when the concept gets clear the
student
 start to grow
interest
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interested
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 in his studies. Increasing interests will help the
student
 do better in his examination and achieve good grades. In conclusion, additional
classes
 after
school
 for weak
students
 is necessary for overcoming their weakness and to develop
interest
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 in their
school
 activities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underachieving pupils
  • compulsory after school activities
  • academic support
  • personalized attention
  • consistent participation
  • time management
  • discipline
  • teamwork
  • resentment
  • motivation
  • part-time jobs
  • family responsibilities
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