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Some people think that young people should be required to do unpaid work helping people in the community. Are disadvantages of this requirement greater than the benefits for the community and individuals?

#people #work #community #requirement #individuals
It is acknowledged that doing some free work in
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 of
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 had better
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be demanded from youngsters. While
requirement
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the requirement
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 of
unpaid
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an unpaid
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 job
bring
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 some benefits, I
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 that it is more likely to have long-term drawbacks for their lives. On the one hand, working freely for public weal appears to have some benefits. It is
a
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 ideal opportunity for young ones to help people, boost their self-esteem, strengthen
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 social network. Helping elderly people via social projects, working as
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a volunteer
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volunteer
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volunteers
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 in events cause create
sense
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 of being useful. Volunteering allows them to connect to
community
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the community
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 and make it
better
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 place. Even helping out with the smallest things can make a real
differences
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to
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lives
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 of people, animals, and
organization
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 in need. Despite
above mentioned
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 advantages,
drawbacks
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the drawbacks
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 of doing some free work in
favor
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 of
public
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 are far greater .
Firstly
, young girls and boys are very likely to get demotivated due to unpaid
labor
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.
Thus
, they allocate
their
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 most productive and valuable time of their lives for meeting
this
 requirement rather than determining their dream job,
learn
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 live financially independent.
However
, they do not get any payment in return
of
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this
labor
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 and can not experience
sense
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a sense
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 of earning their own money.
Moreover
, it is inevitable that younger ages
is
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suitable
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a suitable
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 time for studying, consolidating knowledge on selected fields, discovering new places, expanding world knowledge.
At
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the
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 result of spending energy and time for fulfilling discharged obligations for helping
community
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the community
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, when it comes
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issues relating to self-improvement,
majority
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 of adolescents can get more exhausted. In conclusion,
although
 there are some upsides of unpaid work , I consider that disadvantages of it are more than advantages.
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