Young people are often the first to suffer when job opportunities are scarce. In which ways does age affect employment opportunities? How might employers deal with the issue fairly?

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Sporting has become a topic of broad interest. Some people maintain that becoming host of major sporting

events

such

as football world cup or the

olympics

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will have some advantages to the

country

However

, there have some fees

can

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that can

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be excessive and may

be divert

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divert

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money from other important areas.

This

essay will pinpoint the benefit of hosting

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apply

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sporting

events

and in my view,

this

trend will affect the financial implications. Admittedly, there are several benefits associated with

this

issue.

Firstly

, their

country

will increase the profile.

For example

, when the football world cup is organized in Canada, Canada will become famous, many people know

this

country

and visit. That helps the development’s tourism.

Secondly

, being a host of major sporting

events

will make citizens proud of their

country

and have

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good thinking about sports.

For instance

, when hosting

a sporting

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sporting events

a sporting event

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events

, that

events

will be supported by their citizens and promote people to play more sports.

In other words

, hosting

a sporting

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a sporting event

sporting events

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events

will increase the profile’s

country

and help citizens have

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good thinking about sports.

However

, in my

opinion

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this

trend is not completely beneficial, there are some negative aspects that affect the financial implications.

Firstly

, in order to host

a major sporting

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major sporting events

a major sporting event

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events

, their

country

will pay some

fee

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fees

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tax

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taxes

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to build a stadium.

For example

, the tax will increase every year, if they are not careful, they will lose money or go bankrupt.

Secondly

, In conclusion,

this

issue could bring about certain benefits, but its negative consequences should not be overlooked. As a matter of fact,

this

issue has some serious negative

affects

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the

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financial implications.

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Young people are often the first to suffer when job opportunities are scarce. In which ways does age affect employment opportunities? How might employers deal with the issue fairly?

Your opinion

Some people think job satisfaction is more important than job security, while others believe that having a permanent job is better than enjoying the job. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone (cellphone) apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this developement has more advantages or more disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?

Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and solutions.