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Traffic and housing problems in major cities could be solved by moving large companies and factories and their employees to the countryside. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

#traffic #cities #companies #factories #employees #countryside
In recent years around the world, there is
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 traffic and housing capacity in metropolitan
cities
. To resolve these challenges there we're plenty of
option
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 and out which the best possible option is the moment of huge industries and their employees to
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country side
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. I will agree on
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 we need
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, there is
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 growth of
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 population in recent years when we compare
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 decade.
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 real estate market for
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. Another major concern was public transportation in existing major
cities
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, all old
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 of
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 two centuries. They didn't expect the vast growth in personal transportation which leads
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 jams on these tiny roads. The one possible way to solve
this
 problem is moving all vast industries away from the major
cities
. It obviously demands their employees to move nearer to
work place
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. It will help reduction in housing demand and traffic jams.
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, we are supposed to consider
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effect
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 our greenhouse. In conclusion, by consideration of above two
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 it is obvious to move large industries towards
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the country
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country side
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countryside
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without
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 effecting our greenhouse agriculture.
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