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Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two charts illustrate the percentage changes of
households
 owning the 3 home appliances (washing machine, refrigerator, vacuum cleaner) and the number of weekly
hours
 per household spent doing housework in one country from 1920 to 2019. All the 3 categories spread over the domestic
households
 there during the given years. The most dramatic change occurred in refrigerator ownership from 0% of the
households
 in 1920 to 100% of those in 1980. Following
this
, the figure
of
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 vacuum cleaners steadily increased between 1920 and 2000, with 30% and 100% respectively.
In contrast
, washing machines were owned the most of the three in 1920, increased slightly until 1960, and fluctuated with a narrow range reaching the bottom of the three.
Households
 succeed in reducing the number of
hours
 of housework per week between 1920 to 2019. Until 1960, the figure decreased rapidly from 50
hours
 in 1920 to 20
hours
 in 1960, after which the downwards trend showed down. Overall, from 1920 to 1960, the proportion of
households
 owning the house appliances surged, and the number of
hours
 of housework per week decreased dramatically before the range of both the change unveiled smaller after 1980.
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