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Some people feel that governments should take a large proportion of people' salaries to pay for public services such as roads and schools. Other thinks high taxes are bad. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many
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 hold the view that a major portion of
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's earning should be taken for community services like schools and roads ,
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 some
people
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 assume that as a bad idea. I will argue both points and present my opinion. On the one hand, individuals who agree with a high ratio of taxes, care about life welfare for their child and themselves, which mean they like to live in a perfect society.
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, parents would like their children educated in a school of high quality, and
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 they want to drive on the roads with good condition to have easy commit.
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, some consent that the state enforces a high
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 of taxes.
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, some believe that high taxes in an awful idea. They do not want to give a major
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 of their earnings to the government. These
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 think that the public facility has to
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 by big public factories or companies which have broad income annually. To illustrate, the oil and gas factory earn significant outcomes by selling these products to foreign some of
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 could use for public facility providers. To conclude,
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 some agree that the salary has taken for the public facility by the government as a tax is
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, different opinion has thought by others. Though in my view giving an extensive
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 of the income to government is accurate, that payment is for our life and our children's life's welfare, to live in well situation and society.
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