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every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world.

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In various nations around the world, many people have been learning more than
one
language
 during their school time in order to tackle the problem easily in the
future
.
For example
, pupils who have learned more than
one
language
 faced no issue communicating with others.
However
, there is a small number of pupils who can't cope well in learning more than
one
language
. I strongly agree that several
languages
 should die out
accordingly
 and left only a few
languages
 that are useful in the
future
. There are several reasons why not beneficial
language
 should discard over the period.
One
 of the most significant is that the majority of the people are communicating using an international
language
 which is known as English.
For example
, the poverty countries are starting to learn English in school. So, many international businesses are using international
language
 to communicate.
As a result
, other
languages
 will be less useful in the
future
 market,
thus
 these
languages
 should discard slowly among the generations.
Moreover
, people who learn a few useful
languages
 will not mix up the grammar. To illustrate
this
, Mandarin and English are
in contrast
 with each other in grammars. So, to prevent
such
 things happens, the government should emphasize on the school to only focus on the relevant subject to be taught to the pupils. In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I believe that less input of the
language
 to humans will provide the best result in the
future
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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