Some feel that school should be mixed with both girls and boys attending while others feel the genders ought to separated. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

People are divided in their opinion regarding what educational system will be more beneficial for the
students
, is it separate school for
boys
and
girls
or studying combined ? Many suggest that
both
boys
and
girls
should be educated separately.
On the other hand
, a number of people believe
both
genders should be taught in combined
schools
. After analyzing
both
sides I will give my own opinion.
First
and foremost,
mixed gender
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schools
create an educational environment
boys
and
girls
receive amenities together .Some people are supporting
because
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they believe when
students
of all ages will receive an education from institutions, they can acquire better communication skills.
Students
might not be uncomfortable
to have
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a conversation
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conversation
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with someone who feels like a stranger .
Secondly
,
co-educations
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co-education
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students
are emotionally matured in their relations with
their
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opposite sex.
Finally
,
co-educational
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environment is bridge the equality gap between male and female .
For instance
, a woman nowadays has the same rights as a man.
Thus
it is essential in the modern world to understand that knowledge has nothing to do with a particular gender.
On the other hand
, others opinion that
single sex
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schools
are more effective to teach
both
boys
and
girls
due to,
this
type of
schools
atmosphere motivate the
students
to concentrate their
students
more avoid attention any
ueusual
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unusual
things.
Moreover
,
single gender
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institutions give more opportunities to select their
favorite
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subjects without any obstacles.
In addition
, school
authority
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authorities
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are relaxed because they don’t worry about sexual
harassement
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harassment
.
Furthermore
, there is no risk of encouraging intimate
relationship
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at
the
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early age. To sum up, after
aforementioned
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discussion , I would say ,
both
sides have some positive impacts as well as negative impacts. Basically , it depends on the institute and how well a child adapts to his or her
surrounds
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. Parents can play the most vital role here because they only decide where their children will go for medication.
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