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Some feel that school should be mixed with both girls and boys attending while others feel the genders ought to separated. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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People are divided in their opinion regarding what educational system will be more beneficial for the
students
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, is it separate school for
boys
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 and
girls
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 or studying combined ? Many suggest that
both
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boys
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 and
girls
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 should be educated separately.
On the other hand
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 , a number of people believe
both
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 genders should be taught in combined
schools
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. After analyzing
both
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 sides I will give my own opinion.
First
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 and foremost,
mixed gender
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mixed-gender
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schools
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 create an educational environment
boys
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 and
girls
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 receive amenities together .Some people are supporting
because
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 they believe when
students
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 of all ages will receive an education from institutions, they can acquire better communication skills.
Students
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 might not be uncomfortable
to have
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a conversation
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conversation
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conversations
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 with someone who feels like a stranger .
Secondly
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,
co-educations
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co-education
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students
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 are emotionally matured in their relations with
their
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 opposite sex.
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,
co-educational
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the co-educational
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 environment is bridge the equality gap between male and female .
For instance
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 , a woman nowadays has the same rights as a man.
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 it is essential in the modern world to understand that knowledge has nothing to do with a particular gender.
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, others opinion that
single sex
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schools
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 are more effective to teach
both
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boys
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 and
girls
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 due to,
this
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 type of
schools
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 atmosphere motivate the
students
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 to concentrate their
students
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 more avoid attention any
ueusual
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unusual
 things.
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 ,
single gender
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single-gender
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 institutions give more opportunities to select their
favorite
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 subjects without any obstacles.
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, school
authority
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authorities
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 are relaxed because they don’t worry about sexual
harassement
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harassment
 .
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, there is no risk of encouraging intimate
relationship
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relationships
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 at
the
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an
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 early age. To sum up, after
aforementioned
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 discussion , I would say ,
both
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 sides have some positive impacts as well as negative impacts. Basically , it depends on the institute and how well a child adapts to his or her
surrounds
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. Parents can play the most vital role here because they only decide where their children will go for medication.

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