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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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In major developed countries people are of opinion in constructing
high speed
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trains oppose to others who think invest more on Present resources of public transport for
betterment
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 of those. I would like to support in
favor
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 of
high speed
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projects and explain
further
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same
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 time we should never neglect our existing infrastructure. In today's era of
fast paced
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 life
wher
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where
when
 we can have
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 of activities done with just
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using
 fingertips and computers ,there's
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huge demand for quick and safe
transportation
 for goods and passengers which will be
ecofriendly
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 in nature. Bullet trains are one of those options in my opinion and
this
 will revolutionize the way of present
transportation
.
This
 type of development will cut down travel time to almost one-
third
 between
city
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.For example
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a proposed bullet train project between Edmonton and Calgary in Canada will bring distance between these two cities only
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minute from 2and half
hour
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. On the other
hand
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 we should keep checking on our existing
transportation
 system for routine maintenance and updates which needed in
timely
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 manner so
life
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the life
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 of citizens and business owners will remain stressfree and those means of old
transportation
are remain
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reliable throughout the transition to new developments. So I will support
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 transport development
with
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carrying existing infrastructure with me as a support system for
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smooth transition to
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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