Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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impression is very important to
someone
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who doesn't know you. All
companies
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have
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unique
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code for their
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employees
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people
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the people
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think that
companies
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will appreciate their
employees
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who
dress
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smartly
rathan
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than
their
work
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performance
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. In my opinion, we should all value people who
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smartly at
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as
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work as
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their
work
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performance
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.
Firstly
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,
companies
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may have
unique
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a unique
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dress
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code
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codes
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for
thier
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their
employees
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to follow. We have to
dress
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appropriatly
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appropriately
depending on the
job
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and
companies
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'
requirement
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requirements
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. Some
companies
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even provided
unifrom
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uniform
for their
employees
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to wear at
work
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. Dressing code can represent your
job
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and your company and by doing
this
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,
employees
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are paying respect
on
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to
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their
job
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.
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, a doctor will put on their white long coat while they are on duty. You do not expect to see a doctor who has
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on rather than a white coat.
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, we can not judge
someone
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on their
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appreance
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appearance
.
Someone
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dresses smartly at
work
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doesn't mean that he/she performs well at
work
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.
Companies
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should value both
employees
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'
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appreance
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appearance
and
work
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performance
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. We can not combine
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appreance
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appearance
and
performance
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together when managers evaluate their
employees
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.
Secondly
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,
bank
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tellers have to wear their
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uniform
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to
work
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.
Bank
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uniform
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is a unique symbol for
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bank
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a bank
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and it represents the whole organisation. As we
all
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are all
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aware that it is important to
dress
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smartly at
work
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for
bank
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tellers as they are dealing with both internal and external customers.
On the other hand
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, it does not
required
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require
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for every
bank
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job
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position to wear
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uniform
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a uniform
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at
work
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e.g. cleaners. Cleaners for a particular company are only dealing with their internal customers so it is not necessary to
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company's
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the company's
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uniform
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on
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apply
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when they are at
work
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. In conclusion,
good
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a good
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appreance
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appearance
at
work
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can give a good impression to
someone
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who doesn't know you.
However
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,
companies
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can not relate on
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appreance
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appearance
to judge
someone
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work ability
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workability
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and
performance
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. We should treat everyone equal and respect
your
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our
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colleagues at
work
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.
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