Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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impression is very important to
someone
who doesn't know you. All
companies
have
their
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unique
dress
code for their
emloyees
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employees
to follow. Most
of
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people
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the people
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think that
companies
will appreciate their
employees
who
dress
smartly
rathan
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than
their
work
performance
. In my opinion, we should all value people who
dress
smartly at
work
as
work as
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their
work
performance
.
Firstly
,
companies
may have
unique
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a unique
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dress
code
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codes
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for
thier
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their
employees
to follow. We have to
dress
appropriatly
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appropriately
depending on the
job
and
companies
'
requirement
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requirements
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. Some
companies
even provided
unifrom
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uniform
for their
employees
to wear at
work
. Dressing code can represent your
job
and your company and by doing
this
,
employees
are paying respect
on
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to
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their
job
.
For example
, a doctor will put on their white long coat while they are on duty. You do not expect to see a doctor who has
pajamas
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pyjamas
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on rather than a white coat.
However
, we can not judge
someone
on their
appreance
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appearance
.
Someone
dresses smartly at
work
doesn't mean that he/she performs well at
work
.
Companies
should value both
employees
'
appreance
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appearance
and
work
performance
. We can not combine
appreance
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appearance
and
performance
together when managers evaluate their
employees
.
Secondly
,
bank
tellers have to wear their
bank
uniform
to
work
.
Bank
uniform
is a unique symbol for
bank
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a bank
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and it represents the whole organisation. As we
all
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aware that it is important to
dress
smartly at
work
for
bank
tellers as they are dealing with both internal and external customers.
On the other hand
, it does not
required
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require
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for every
bank
job
position to wear
uniform
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a uniform
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at
work
e.g. cleaners. Cleaners for a particular company are only dealing with their internal customers so it is not necessary to
dress
company's
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the company's
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uniform
on
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apply
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when they are at
work
. In conclusion,
good
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a good
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appreance
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appearance
at
work
can give a good impression to
someone
who doesn't know you.
However
,
companies
can not relate on
appreance
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appearance
to judge
someone
work ability
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workability
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and
performance
. We should treat everyone equal and respect
your
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our
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colleagues at
work
.
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