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Some people think that managers alone should make decisions in the company, while others think that employees should be involved in the decision-making process too. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is often argued that all problems in the
company
 should be solved by leaders of it, others
instead
 say that usual workers participation is significant.
This
 essay agrees that
company’s
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 future plans and actions need to be made by bosses. Employees are the main working source of the
company
 and,
therefore
 they understand
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 internal problems and solve them effectively. They have an opportunity to increase profit from the sails by improving
working
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 process, which leads to more efficient production of the product.
Moreover
, they know how to decrease unnecessary expenditures, due to their experience in the working process. A lot of small businesses (like my fathers’) are asking their workers and have great profit by not wasting money and analyzing the market.
However
, in large companies managers have years and years of experience and education in MBA universities.
This
 knowledge allows them to make
right
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 decisions that
leads
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 to growth of the sales.
Furthermore
, it is extremely hard to plan anything, when
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 number of people suggests their ideas. Brainstorming leads to mess in heads and
losing
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 of
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concentration on the most significant parts of the planning.
For example
, all successful
IT-companies
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 in Silicon Valley like Google, Apple, Facebook have thousands and thousands of employees that programming services for customers, but there are only
few
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 main managers (Marc Zuckerberg, Tim Cook), who make important decisions. In conclusion, workers mainly can solve
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 problems of the
company
.
However
, managers make
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 profit for the
company
, which is
more
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 prioritized task.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • top-down approach
  • hierarchical structure
  • grassroots level
  • strategic planning
  • on-the-ground experience
  • inclusive management
  • employee engagement
  • democratic process
  • transparency
  • cohesion
  • morale
  • practical insights
  • long-term goals
  • mutual respect
  • resistance to change
  • team dynamics
  • broader perspective
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