The graphs below provide the information on global population figures and figures of urban population in different world religion

The graphs below provide the information on global population figures and figures of urban population in different world  religion
The graphs elucidate the information about world
population
growth from 1800 to 2100 and
opulence
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of developed and developing
religion
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religions
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during 2015-2040.
Overall
, it can be inferred that the highest populace shall be noticed by the
year
2040 and the count of
people
living in developed areas shall remain similar in all the years of 2015
while
continuous increase shall be
witnesses
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in the case of developing areas. It is evident from the line graph that in 1800, the total public was equal to 1000
million
people
. The figure increases gradually till 1960 with which it becomes exactly thrice of the initial
year
. After that, from the
year
1960 to 2020, no doubt, there was an upsurge but it was a shrift incline that made the
population
of the world , approximately 7500
million
people
with
inclining
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trend the count of
people
shall be the maximum
that is
roughly 8000
million
.
However
, there shall be a decrement in the world
population
in
next
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the next
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given years to almost 600
million
people
. Turning to words with
bar
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graph ,
developed
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the developed
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religion
population
was about 1200
million
in 2015, which shall remain
same
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the same
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after two decades.
However
, developing areas followed an increasing trend in the given time period, in 2015
near
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nearly
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2200
million
people
were living in developing regions , which
was
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increased by 200
million
in 2020. From the
year
2025 to 2040, the
population
in
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apply
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developing a religion shall be inclined with 1800
million
and touch the peak point ( about 4000
million
) in 2040.
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