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Studying with a group of students in a classroom is more beneficial than learning online at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#group #students #classroom #home
Some people think traditional learning models
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 more effective than remote learning from home. In my point of view, I partly disagree with them because of
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several reasons. It is difficult to deny the advantages of studying with friends directly.
Firstly
,
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 learning can provide a learning environment where
students
 can
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 have social connections. It will help learners to acquire knowledge by interacting with peers and lecturers directly.
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 their questions
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easily, which is essential for them to engage in the lessons.
Moreover
, traditional learning is
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advantageous
 in giving
students
 chances to improve practical skills through extracurricular activities. Compared to the modern class, where there are little communication and peer support,
students
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 discussing with their classmates, which leads to the decreasing outcomes undesirably.
On the other hand
, online classroom at home is being chosen by many people.
First
 and foremost,
students
 can learn at their own pace without depending on any schedule. They are able to learn
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regardless
 of time and places, which is suitable for those who are busy with work.
Furthermore
,
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 class is more convenient for
students
 who live far away from school because they can still participate in
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 course without
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. It will help them in reducing the costs and saving money. In conclusion, while
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 am not strongly opposed
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 idea of maintaining the traditional studying model but I believe that the Internet is becoming commonly and comfortably for
students
 to study at home.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Collaborative learning
  • Debate
  • Discipline
  • Engagement
  • Feedback loop
  • Peer support
  • Educational resources
  • Adaptive learning
  • Self-motivation
  • Independent study
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual classroom
  • Accessibility
  • E-learning
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