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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?

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The line graph illustrates the time consumption by the British
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 of three divided phone calls during 1995 to 2002. Overall, the chart despites, three main telephone categories,
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 as domestic fixed-line, national and international calls and the mobiles. According to the given ,details the majority of
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 use by local fixed telephone and the less amount of residences were used handphones from 1995 to 2002.
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 of all, in 1995 local calls was accounted for approximately 72
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. From 1996 and ,1999 many
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 have been used by domestic lines. It was increased over the time period and
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 reached the peak amount and it was almost 90
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.
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, between 2000 and 2002 it was declined by approximately 18
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, mobile phones have been significantly growing
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time period. In 1999 it was about 12 and in 2008 it was reached around 43
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.
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, local and international calls have been dramatically increased. In 1995 about 34 and from 2002 accounted for about 62
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 in billions. To sum up, the majority of UK
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 used by local fixed-line compared with other two categories.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • privacy
  • outdoor activities
  • gardening
  • customization options
  • renovate
  • structural changes
  • investments
  • appreciation/depreciation
  • maintenance costs
  • utility costs
  • security features
  • gated entries
  • surveillance systems
  • shared amenities
  • community centers
  • suburban
  • rural areas
  • commutes
  • urban centers
  • public transport
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