Students are becoming more and more reliant on the internet. While the internet is convenient, it has many negative effects and its use for educational purposes should be restricted.

In recent years, the
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has been a major change in improving the educational system.
Although
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is beneficial but being fully dependent on the
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students
. I strongly agree about limiting
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internet
use in the educational system and the reason behind my view will be discussed in the following paragraphs.
To begin
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internet
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process is because it may affect
students
behaviour.
As a result
of that,
students
may generate health problems and concerns,
such
as burnout, anxiety, lack of sleep, and obesity due to sitting all day on the computer.
Furthermore
,
students
being fully dependent on the
internet
for education can greatly affect their social life in school. To illustrate,
students
may have difficulties in the ability to express themselves due to low communication skills, because of the time spent on the
internet
, and that will develop social isolation habits, depression, loneliness, cyberbullying and that may result in suicidal thoughts due to being alone without friends.
However
, using the
internet
in improving teaching approaches is beneficial as it enhances the
students
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creativity, creating
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strong knowledge by having access to any information, improving
students
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, and increasing
students
responsibility on self-study. Needless to say, balancing and minimizing the use of the
internet
in education will enhance the
students
' ability on a personal level and an educational level. By reducing dependency on the
internet
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can be avoided. To conclude, using the
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  • accessibility
  • independent learning
  • critical thinking
  • excessive reliance
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  • crucial
  • problem-solving
  • overly dependent
  • diversity
  • perspectives
  • global cultures
  • enriching
  • unrestricted
  • information overload
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