In some countries, government are encouraging industries and businesses to move to regional areas outside the big cities Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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sector is one of the fields that have explosive development in the world.

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around the

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of these factories and company buildings were built in the centralized area of big cities. Some people argue that

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specific location, those buildings should be moved to

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, there are several disadvantages to have those facilities in the regional areas. Most of them

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, by moving them to the suburbs, the production hours would be longer and inefficient.

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source warehouse to the factory.

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more cost in transporting the finished goods to the customers.

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as water and air

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impurities

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, moving these industrial

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outside the cities could

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business

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easier search of a

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area, the value of

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land will still be much cheaper.

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, the remaining

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could be invested in more important aspects. Another good thing about

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movement

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is that the companies could

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use surrounding people as human resources to work at the companies. Not only

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will benefit the societies

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will

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bring more

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value to the industrial images. The decision to take

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business

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from the big cities has its own perks and disadvantages, the stakeholders should take

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decision carefully to bring benefits not only for the rich but

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for the society.

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In some countries, government are encouraging industries and businesses to move to regional areas outside the big cities Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

In many cities, an increasing number of people do not know their neighbors and there is a lack of a sense of community. What are the causes of this problem? How can it be solved?

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In many countries around the world,rural people are Moving to cities,so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Innovation is often driven by the pursuit of profit and economic growth. However, some argue that it should prioritize addressing social and environmental issues. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.