In some countries, government are encouraging industries and businesses to move to regional areas outside the big cities Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, the economic sector is one of the fields that have explosive development in the world.
Consequently
, more and more facilities related to
this
field appear around the nation. The majority of these factories and company buildings were built in the centralized area of big cities. Some people argue that
instead
of being built in
this
specific location, those buildings should be moved to a location
further
from the towns. In
this
essay, I will cover
this
opinion, including its pros and cons. For the business owners, there are several disadvantages to have those facilities in the regional areas. Most of them are related to convenience and cost.
For example
, by moving them to the suburbs, the production hours would be longer and inefficient.
Firstly
, there is additional distribution time from the materials source warehouse to the factory.
Secondly
, there is
also
more cost in transporting the finished goods to the customers.
Lastly
, the workers will
also
take longer hours to travel from their own home to
workplace
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. For populations around the factories, they will
also
be impacted negatively by the pollutions,
such
as water and air impurities.
On the other hand
, moving these industrial centres outside the cities could
also
gives some positive impacts
to
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the business owners.
In addition
to a much easier search of a potential area, the value of
this
land will still be much cheaper.
Thus
, the remaining money could be invested in more important aspects. Another good thing about
this
movement is that the companies could
also
use surrounding people as human resources to work at the companies. Not only
this
will benefit the societies but
this
will
also
bring more added value to the industrial images. The decision to take
business
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the business

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further
from the big cities has its own perks and disadvantages, the stakeholders should take
this
decision carefully to bring benefits not only for the rich but
also
for the society.
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