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Planting trees is very important .some people say that trees should be planted in the vacant areas of cities and town, while others says that housing facilities should be build instead. what is youropinion?

#trees #people #areas #cities #town #facilities #youropinion
Nowadays, Planting
trees
 in my country are
in-demand
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. In my
perspective
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 it is important to plant
trees
 in rural and urban areas
,
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 because we can help the globalization as well as the people around us.
Firstly
, most
of
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people
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the people
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 in the town sides prefer to plant a lot of
trees
 as
it
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 useful for them to have
a
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fresh air in their daily lives.
For example
, my relatives in
province
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 have more than twenty
trees
 in the backyards. They said, just in case any calamities happen they are ready because those
trees
 have a big help
on
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 avoiding flash floods.
Secondly
, they loved to sit and have some picnics under the
trees
everytime
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 there is a family
gatherings
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.
On the other hand
, we all know that
modern
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 era today has a big impact
in
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 our daily lives. Bad pollution all over the countries
are
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 happening
bacause
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because
 we don't have enough
trees
.
For instance
, in the Philippines, air pollution is one of the major problems because we have a lot of cars causing
of
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exhaust fumes.
Furthermore
, our government take an action on it.
This
 way, we can avoid a lot of
uncessary
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unnecessary
 things that might happen in the future. To conclude, planting
trees
 has an important role in our lives. For our dearest mother earth and to the people we can save in the future.
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