nowadays many people have access to computers on a wide basis and a large number of children play computer games. What are the positive and negative impacts of playing computer games and what can be done to minimize the bad effects.

It is irritable that, In modern ,world
computer
has a great resource to less the
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. There several individuals opinion that a large number of
children
play
computer
games
. There are
lot
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of factors responsible for
this
problem. Which, I would like to explicate in
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essay and suggest some ways to forward. Commencing with
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prominent reason why
computer
games
can develop
children
's mindset. There are many
games
level
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that level
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up
thinking
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of the youngsters and developed
his
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skills. They learn time value to complete complex in under
time
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. And that
children
's
are win
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also
his confidence level high and he
try
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to continue
this
habit in future.
Such
as some benefits for
the
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computer
games
. They good role in
children
's progress
in
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small age.
Moreover
,
although
computer
games
are a positive
impact
,
however
computer
games
have some negative impacts, a few
computer
games
produce violence. They affect
on
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youngsters
brain
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. His mind
also
going to the violence. And
computer
games
also
impact
on study several times
children
's play
computer
games
his mindset
also
out for studies. And
also
computer
games
impact
on
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the body, daily playing
games
. Which
impact
on
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our eyesight in adult age. While
computer
games
are
also
had negative effects on
children
's. In conclusion, one of there, benefits of
computer
games
. On order
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there are disadvantages too. Even though, parents take steps the negative impacts of
computer
games
.
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