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Not enough students around the world choose to study science subjects at university. What are the reasons for this? What impact does this issue have on society

#students #world #study #science #subjects #university #impact #society
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Education plays a vital role in humans life. Because
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it is needed to be educated in the competitive globe to get respect from the society.
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, nowadays, people are not opting
science related
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subjects
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 to
study
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.
This
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 the reasons and impacts of
above-mentioned
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the above-mentioned
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 issues in detail in the following paragraphs.
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 with, the present-day generation is too optimistic towards arts and
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subjects
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 is because of high paid and reputed job opportunities.
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this
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, the professions like lectures, engineers, accountants and lawyers and all receive good esteem from the community.
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, the noticeable one is, in a particular culture in India girls are not allowed to
study
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 a science degree due to some moral values. To summarize, job opportunities, good pay and consideration are the main reasons for choosing other
subjects
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 rather than science.
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, the above-mentioned problem has
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 demerits. Like, shortage of nurses, doctors and even IT professionals worldwide.
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, during
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 pandemic
situation
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 all the countries are in demand of
staffs
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staff
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 to work in the hospitals.To exemplify, a recent
study
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 report from World Health Organization proved that, one nurse is caring
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 to four patients in
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 Care Unit due to staff shortfall which is actually unethical.
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 of
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the patient
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patient
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patients
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 may fail to receive
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quality care. To summarize, the
impacts
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impact
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 of
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the above-mentioned
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 matter is
deficit
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the deficit
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 number of health care providers
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globally.
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, students should give
importants
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importance
 to all
subjects
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 to
study
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. Because
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 the world needs all
professional
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professionals
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