Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement? What other measures do you think might be effective?

One of the heated issues is growing the cost of car oil is the best direction to solve the problems of increasing
traffic
and
air
pollution. From my perspective, I strongly believe that accumulate the price of gasoline is more advantages than stable cost. It is often argued that expanding the rates of petrol is might be the worst for some people who are unable to pay for expensive gas.
That is
maybe true but, they can modify an issue
by
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other ways which could help in terms of
air
contamination and
traffic
jam
. To illustrate, using bicycles or using republic transportation
instead
of using a car.
Moreover
, a reason that I do agree with is the
air
will be fresh and it is good for individual health.
Secondly
, on the one hand, some people like to used
the
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cars
because it is more comfortable than using
the
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bicycles. On the other hands, some citizen like to used the republic transportation more than the personal
cars
because there are many methods
that
is
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are

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effective to fix the points of pollution and
traffic
jam
.
For example
, the government should contribute the advantages of using less
of
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personal
cars
.
Nevertheless
,
individual
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individuals

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supposed
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are supposed

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to help a country because nowadays there is a lot of
traffic
jam
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jams

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. In conclusion, there
are
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is

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some
argument
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arguments

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that the youth should understand about the riddles of using too
much
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many

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cars
that is
effect
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affect

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the
traffic
jam
and dirty
air
in a country. From my point of view, step up the price of car oil is the best way to Amed these points.
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