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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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It is vital to note that human beings must face unpredictable bad situations some
time
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 in their
life
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 as unhappy occupations or financial crises. Some groups argue that they must admit
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 a bad period without trying.
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, some say we must try as much as we can to prevent or minimize bad situations. So, I will discuss these both arguments and my opinions in
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 we must admit that
life
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 is like a river that faces rocks and falls met some
time
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, and sometimes it flows smoothly, and some scholar says that “Every cloud has a silver lining”.
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Moreover
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 some religions
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 taught that these dark
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 are appeared in our
life
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 due to our bad behaviours in our past
life
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 yet, these persons continuously failing while they trying.
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, negative periods of our
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work places
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 or poverty must admit these people who follows
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 theory. To the contrary other says that as a human we must fight our whole
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 to be
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success
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 in our
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 and being rich. To exemplify
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 if someone having an unsatisfactory job. So he can
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 hard and smart to improve his skills and
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 apply for any other suitable job in the market.
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 it is not our fault to be born poor, if we died as poor it is totally on us. So, it is significant to
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 hard and keep trying every
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 in our
life
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 to gain
success
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. To conclude, I believe as a human we must forget all negative feelings and thoughts in our
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 while embracing positive thinking and eager to be
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success
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 in our
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, So I trust that getting a satisfactory job and gain financial
success
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 is in our hands.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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