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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #cities
The online platform for shopping
all
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for all
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kind
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kinds
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 of materials from groceries to clothing is expanding at a faster pace. Some people opine that due to
such
surge
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a surge
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 in numbers of online buyers, small shops are affected and would one day have to shut down completely. I disagree with the said statement for the reasons stated below in
this
 essay.
To begin
 with,
digital
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the digital
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 way of shopping has its benefits, it is much more convenient to buy all the items just at a click. It has recently gained much popularity owing to the prevailing offers and discounts, as there are no fixed costs involved unlike owning a shop. Having said that, it is not very easy to run an online
business
 too, as it requires customer service and
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relation-building
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relation
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 building much more than any small shop, the brands have to struggle to create their space in the market and
lot
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a lot
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 of research and study is required at regular intervals.
Also
,
still
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 there is a huge portion of
population
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the population
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 who chooses to buy from small shops as they are not well versed with the technological education or equipment to get access to online shopping
platform
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platforms
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, they usually make all of their purchases from local shop owners.
In addition
 to
this
, with the expansion of shopping websites and applications, many opportunities have become open for
the
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apply
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small
business
 owners to integrate with
such
 websites and sell their products online.
For instance
, Amazon provides
such
 an option for
business
 owners all over the world, to be able to sell their products not only to their area but globally. To conclude, I would like to mention, change is imperative,
thus
,
micro businesses
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micro-businesses
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 should adapt to the new shopping era and update themselves by expanding their
business
 circle through
sale
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the sale
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 of items online
instead
 of relying on the old fashioned way of generating income to stay competitive.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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