Children today are too dependent on computers and electronic entertainment. It would be better to encourage them to spend more time outside playing sports and games. Do you agree or disagree?

Together with the computerization of our society, there is a rising

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public awareness about kids, who spend too much time in front of the personal computer or playing video

games

. What is best for children to devote their free time to outdoor activities and conventional

games

or to be at home and entertain themselves with the computer? Some types of PC

games

can be very intelligent and may contain huge educational potential. They can encourage youngsters to develop researching skills and inspire them to learn new things.

However

, a significant amount of video

games

is dumb-type, which develops nothing but button-pushing skill. Unfortunately, these

games

are usually highly addictive.

Thus

, they can cause a lack of physical activity and even serious mental diseases. Outdoor

games

are often more beneficial for kids’ health. They not only train them in terms of agility and endurance but teach children to socialise and make friends.

Moreover

, they make them stronger because of fresh air, physical activity and exposure to

the

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sunlight.

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, being on the street

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always safe. An unattended child can receive trauma or become a subject of crime. I was not a very outgoing and physically active kid and preferred to rather read than play with others. Getting a computer brought more diversity for my leisure and study. It helped me to experience new emotions, learn new things, study English and meet interesting people online. My aptitude in Information technologies has helped me to get a good job and

then

grow up in my job.

Therefore

I think parents should look at their child’s personality in order to decide what is more appropriate. Finding a balance between electronic entertainment and outdoor

games

depends on parents’ ability to identify what best benefits their

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