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Large businesses have big budget for marketing and promotion and as a result, people gravitate towards buying their products. What problem does this cause? What can be done to encourage people to buy local products?

#businesses #budget #promotion #people #gravitate #products
In
this
 competitive world,
the
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extensive
scale
 firms invest a colossal amount in the advertisement of their products to entice the customers to boost their sales. There are several issues
persist
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that persist
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 with
this
 scenario as in
turn
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 it tends to
extinction
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the extinction
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 of native small
scale
 entrepreneurs .
Therefore
, to mitigate the issue steps that need to be taken in
this
 direction shall be explicated
further
. Certainly, with the modernization and trade
treaties
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 it would be feasible for the business tycoons to expand their work throughout the globe.
As a result
 of
this
,
the products
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the cost of the product
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cost
 is ten times higher than its actual manufacturing
cost
, including inclusive taxes and endorsement
cost
 along with profit margin.
Hence
, the goods are sold at greater prices
in contrast
 to
native
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the native
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one
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,
consequently
, leading to
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a rise
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rise
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 in
inflation
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the inflation
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 rate. Another problem
arises
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 is, it
dry
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 up the small industries and undoubtedly, with their dissolution a lot of local skills vanishes.
For instance
, junk food chains destroy the local restaurants serving healthy and nutritious foods.
Thus
, the large
scale
 businesses are accountable for price
hike
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 and fizzle out small entrepreneurs.
On the other hand
, to motivate dwellers of a specific terrain awareness regarding the significance of utilization of native goods and its merits should be highlighted to aware the public by conducting awareness campaigns, seminars and talks. The advantages in context to economical conditions should be imparted to
public
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.
Likewise
, the procurement of local items eventually, generates employment opportunities for the residences along with money inflow. To illustrate,
initially
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 Patanjali was a small
scale
 firm, but with
the
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government support revenue in millions is generated today. In compendium, large businesses sell products at
higher
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a higher
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cost
 is one of the vital
issue
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issues
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 and to motivate people, advantages of local goods should be explained.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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