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A big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

#salary #job #satisfaction
Peace of mind and sense of achievement at
work
 is considered
second
, to a high remuneration at the end of the month. It is clearly visible most of the young generation nowadays seek
for
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better
pay masters
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 than the
work
 culture or
work
 fulfilment, In
conclusion
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 I believe that having the feeling of fulfilment at
work
 is far greater than emotionless cash at the bank statement. The value of having peace of mind at
work
 is a precious gift to have which everyone is not lucky these recently. The research conducted by the scientists at
University
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 of Boston stated that 60% of
young
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 generation entered the industry with a basic salary, yet considered the
work
 culture and ethics before joining as it is far more important than having an exotic
pay check
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 at the end of the month. In my
opinion
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 I believe that having a job is a must to survive the day but not at the cost of your mental wellbeing. Mental health is a hot topic these days and it is far more important to have
sense
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 of achievement at
work
 than
big
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paycheck
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pay check
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.
On the other
hand
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 one can debate money matters to live the life we want to live and in order to do that we need few extra digits on the bank balance.
As per the
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 report published by The Times Magazine clearly shows that there
individuals
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 who have decided to
work
 as hard as they can regardless
the
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work
 culture or ethics but in
pure
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the pure
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 motive of making millions to live the life they always wished for. Having few extra digits on the financial statement is far more joyful for some individuals to accomplish the life they always dreamed of.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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