Since the 18th century technological advance have replaced people in the workplace. with today's technology this process is happening at a greater rate. Technology is increasingly responsible for unemployment. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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There is no doubt that technology has been improved in an immense way since
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century till now. So these
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a greater role in
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workforce
.Here,I completely
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rapid growth of
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technology
is
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directly
responsible for unemployment because of
food
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industries or workers are effecting .
First
of all,
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technology
helps to get done tasks at much
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quicker
speed than humans.
In other words
, most of the
food
processing companies are adopting
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machines
machine
or tools for packaging ,labelling and many more tasks so that they can reduce labour
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.
For instance
, a survey was conducted by Internet Reliance Service in Uk revealed that almost 30% of the employees
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their job in
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industry due to more usage of
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technology
.Even though
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technology
is beneficial for
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businesses
business
but,it
also
leaves people
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unemployment
those who
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education or
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comfortable with the
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complexity
of
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techonology
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technology
.
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Secondly
,
cpmputers
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computers
are widely used in many
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sectors
. To explain it ,usages of emails
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mostly
instead
of papers.
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,
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earlier
days
typwritters
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typewriters
typewriter
were in great demand but now most of the work is
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done online.
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New Zealand
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most of the Post
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had closed many of their branches as most of the
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organisations
are delivering information or data to their customers with the help of computers
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by post.
As a result
, many of the
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permanent
employess
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employees
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of
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technology is going on day by day. Ultimately,
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greater
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unemployement
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unemployment
is heading in many sectors. In conclusion,
although
advanced
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technology
has great impacts on everyone's life,yet
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think it is becoming a ridge
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obstacle
for
food
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industry and handwritten or
paper based
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fields for those who are not
cometetive
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competitive
to the current market needs and
requirments
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requirements
.
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