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Since the 18th century technological advance have replaced people in the workplace. with today's technology this process is happening at a greater rate. Technology is increasingly responsible for unemployment. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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There is no doubt that technology has been improved in an immense way since
18th
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 century till now. So these
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plays
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 a greater role in
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workforce
.Here,I completely
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 rapid growth of
techonolgy
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technology
 is
dircetly
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directly
 responsible for unemployment because of
food
 sector and
paper based
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 industries or workers are effecting .
First
 of all,
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technology
 helps to get done tasks at much
quciker
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quicker
 speed than humans.
In other words
, most of the
food
 processing companies are adopting
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machines
machine
 or tools for packaging ,labelling and many more tasks so that they can reduce labour
cost
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.
For instance
, a survey was conducted by Internet Reliance Service in Uk revealed that almost 30% of the employees
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loose
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lose
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 their job in
food
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the food
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 industry due to more usage of
techonology
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technology
.Even though
techonolgy
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technology
 is beneficial for
businesss
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businesses
business
 but,it
also
 leaves people
unemployement
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unemployment
 those who
lacks
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in
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education or
not
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are not
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 comfortable with the
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complexity
 of
the
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techonology
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technology
.
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Secondly
,
cpmputers
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computers
 are widely used in many
secotors
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sectors
. To explain it ,usages of emails
replaced
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 mostly
instead
 of papers.
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,
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earlier
 days
typwritters
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typewriters
typewriter
 were in great demand but now most of the work is
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 done online.
For example
,In
NewZealand
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New Zealand
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 most of the Post
Office
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offices
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 had closed many of their branches as most of the
orgnsiations
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organisations
 are delivering information or data to their customers with the help of computers
not
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 by post.
As a result
, many of the
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permanent
employess
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employees
 loos their jobs as
demand
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the demand
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of
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for
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 technology is going on day by day. Ultimately,
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at
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 greater
extent
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unemployement
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unemployment
 is heading in many sectors. In conclusion,
although
 advanced
techonogy
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technology
 has great impacts on everyone's life,yet
i
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 think it is becoming a ridge
obstackle
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obstacle
 for
food
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the food
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 industry and handwritten or
paper based
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paper-based
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 fields for those who are not
cometetive
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competitive
 to the current market needs and
requirments
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requirements
.
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