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Some people think that the main factors influencing a child's development these days are things such as television, friends, and music. Others believe that the family still remains more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Factors
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 playing
role
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 in
child
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development
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 always remain a question of debate, some individuals are in favour of television,
friends
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 and
music
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 and on the other ,hand few are of opinion that family have more to do with
child
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development
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 and I am going to view both sides of the issue but personally I am in favour of family's
role
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 is vital in children's growth.
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 let's consider the television,
friends
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 and
music
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 as a catalyst of
development
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, so one can say yes these
factors
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 help a
child
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 learn things like rhymes and alphabets in a brilliant way,
music
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 give them pleasant and calming effects ,
friends
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, of course, play a vital
role
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 in creating one's personality. But family plays the greatest
role
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 in a
child
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 mentoring as in early periods parents are deciding for kids how much time they are going to have television,
music
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 especially what kind of, and
friends
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 are
also
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 tailored by family. In short, they are creating a whole environment for fully positive or negative growth by adding or deleting above mentioned
factors
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. Parents create examples by showing their own behaviour like praying every day in the morning, respect for the elderly ,law and order, keeping the place neat and clean, following food trends like vegan or non-vegetarian .For example one of my family
friends
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 kids is praying at an early age, chanting hymns and religious slogans every day. So,in the
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end-all the above-discussed
factors
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 have their own
role
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 to play but in my personal thinking parents and family members are the sole governing force in a
child
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's overall multidirectional and full-blown
development
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.
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