In many countries, women no longer feel the need to get married. Some people believe that this is because women are abale to earn their own income and therefore do not require the financial security that marriage can bring. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

In the world, the rate of single
women
is  increasing and it more and more get independent more than in the  past and plenty people suppose that having a financial authority for female no longer need to get married,
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essay would be presented agree and disagree. In the contemporary, according to agree for
this
issue many girl and
women
In the modern age we are seeing that if they get married to bad men, they will  do not
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possess and money ,
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financial by their husband and they have right about justice about their possess,
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,
women
who have a good a position high job or education without a husband can be concentrated  on their work and  to get more
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their situation . one other hand,  the plenty  of
women
who do not have a good  partner have many problem
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such
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and so on 
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, living alone can be happened several difficulties about their security even will be killed by others about their possess and money or other issues , having a good  partner and get married carefully can obtain more useful their profession and everyone neither girl nor woman
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to positive man. sum to up, it is true that education or possess they do not belong other especially today's
women
believe that for getting more excellent condition no longer men but having a good partner can be gotten more achievements cussfully about tax and other own and having good cooperation cab be made certain great future.
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