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It is not necessary to travel to other places to learn about culture and people, because people can learn from books, films or the internet. Do you agree or disagree?

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these days, online shopping is surprisingly much more famous owing to its easiness and comfortable. We can buy several things while we are sitting around inside our house. there are a lot of benefits of using
this
 method of shopping,
however
, some drawbacks are influenced as well.
To begin
 with the positive side, there are two beneficial effects on shopping stuff via internet pathway.
First
, reducing
time
 in preparation,
this
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is the most
favorable
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 for online shopping because you can scroll it on a screen inside private places, not to
aware
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 of travel
time
 or physical outlook.
For instance
, you have not to wait for your girlfriend to choose the wearing cloth, adding some cosmetics on her face anymore, shopping in private habitat is the reason why it is.
In addition
, traffic congestion and
time
 wasted by it
also
 not to think.
Next
 is about analyzing the
products
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taking
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 a decision. Online technology makes people get into access massive data including
products
 that you are interested
to
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accquire
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acquire
. You can simply search for the information or reviews of it with one click, a lot of detail
then
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 will
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 out to your head immediately. You can observe it as much as you want before deciding whether to buy it or not. Let's move to the drawbacks, some drawbacks
is
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 involved in online method purchasing. You can easily be
decieved
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deceived
 by
the
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the picture of the product
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products
 picture from whom who is dishonest and want to sell terrible things
in
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high
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 price. The
diciever
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deceiver
receiver
 can insert many quality photos into their
products
, which the original is more
awlful
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awful
 than the pictures, to convince you to buy it
in
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 high price. To sum up, online shopping
give
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 you an enormous value to be kept, a
time
. In my opinion, saving plenty of
time
 for spending
in
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 more crucial work is found to be superior for me. By the way, concerning the pictures of
products
 is vital to purchase the stuff in high quality and not get fool of it. According to all of those things, the
benifits
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benefits
 still overcame the
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dis advantages
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.
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