Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

these days, online shopping is surprisingly much more famous owing to its easiness and comfortable. We can buy several things while we are sitting around inside our house. there are a lot of benefits of using
this
method of shopping,
however
, some drawbacks are influenced as well.
To begin
with the positive side, there are two beneficial effects on shopping stuff via internet pathway.
First
, reducing
time
in preparation,
this
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is the most
favorable
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for online shopping because you can scroll it on a screen inside private places, not to
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of travel
time
or physical outlook.
For instance
, you have not to wait for your girlfriend to choose the wearing cloth, adding some cosmetics on her face anymore, shopping in private habitat is the reason why it is.
In addition
, traffic congestion and
time
wasted by it
also
not to think.
Next
is about analyzing the
products
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a decision. Online technology makes people get into access massive data including
products
that you are interested
to
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accquire
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acquire
. You can simply search for the information or reviews of it with one click, a lot of detail
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out to your head immediately. You can observe it as much as you want before deciding whether to buy it or not. Let's move to the drawbacks, some drawbacks
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involved in online method purchasing. You can easily be
decieved
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deceived
by
the
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the picture of the product
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products
picture from whom who is dishonest and want to sell terrible things
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high
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price. The
diciever
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deceiver
receiver
can insert many quality photos into their
products
, which the original is more
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awful
than the pictures, to convince you to buy it
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high price. To sum up, online shopping
give
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you an enormous value to be kept, a
time
. In my opinion, saving plenty of
time
for spending
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more crucial work is found to be superior for me. By the way, concerning the pictures of
products
is vital to purchase the stuff in high quality and not get fool of it. According to all of those things, the
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