Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.What is your opinion about this?

#people #home #workplace #place

One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is

organization

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of our environment. It is undeniable that a home and a workplace are an essential part of our life,

therefore

, some

people

tell that these places should be tidy. In

this

essay

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this

tendency will be scrutinized and I will give my opinion regarding

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one. It is obvious that well organized our workplace or a lawn before a house are our face

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because they introduce us.

As a result

people

judge us for the

first

vision. At the same time, the order of our environment shows other individuals there is

the

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order in our heads too and we

organized

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hard-working and punctual human beings. As far as I am concerned, a well-organized common employee is much better for an employer

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a disorganized genius worker. A good example here is my colleague Svyatoslav

Dmitriv

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Dmitriev

. He is an extremely tidy person,

consequently

, his workshop

as well as his equipment which he repairs are very clean and everything

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works without any problems. Undoubtedly, he became

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leader of our team. Owing to

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quality, our plant is the best in our company in comparison with other ones.

On the other hand

, there are

people

who demonstrate another behaviour and attitude to tidy to their surroundings. They prefer living in chaos. There is

disorder

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in their houses and their lives. Taking an example

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schoolmate Maxim Zakhryapa. He is the best example for understanding

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of a

wrong lifestyle. Looking at his behaviour, home or workplace, everybody understands that disorder directs us

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incorrect

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direction and our future is incomprehensible, the main reason is Maxim did not archive anything in his life. Taking everything mentioned into account, in our final

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we can say that tidy is the main aspect of life. In my opinion, well-organized

people

are doomed to success.

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clutter-free
productivity
mental clarity
efficiency
professionalism
first impressions
ergonomics
aesthetically pleasing
compulsive neatness
functional space
minimising distractions
systematic arrangement
time management
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