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some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment.are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compered with living in an apartment

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It has been observed that most of the population is compatible with living in their own space rather than living in a residence. In
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essay I will discuss both advantages and disadvantages of the above situations and I believe that three are many advantages to living in a building.
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, houses are built by the owner’s plans. They use to find a better draftsman,
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 they execute their dream home plan with him while selecting the better location for each part of the home, while they are not much calculating the cost. As an
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example we could see most of the big houses are built with two to three stories, but not using most of the sections of their homes.
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, Human behaviour has not been changed for many years because they wanted to live in their dream space.
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 they need to have their own slot to have with swimming pool, some outdoor kids play area with coffee table to enjoy the vacation time or weekends. In considering the apartment, draftsmanship was matching to all the expectations which
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 built by the owner's plan and were considered their limit of budget. In ,apartments there was not much compatible to hang out since there is not much space for kids
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 or not much outdoor area which most of the apartment comes with few stories buildings. According to my knowledge and based on the above factors I state that people who selected to live in apartments are not much compatible than the people who live in their own house. Despite all the factors some to live in houses are happier than the apartment environment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • privacy
  • outdoor activities
  • gardening
  • customization options
  • renovate
  • structural changes
  • investments
  • appreciation/depreciation
  • maintenance costs
  • utility costs
  • security features
  • gated entries
  • surveillance systems
  • shared amenities
  • community centers
  • suburban
  • rural areas
  • commutes
  • urban centers
  • public transport
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