Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But others believe that teenage should focus on the subject that they are best at or that they find the most interest. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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The
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need to learn in the schools are debatable. Some of the population have an idea that the youngers within the age 13-19 years old need to focus on each and every subject deliver in the
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, while others thought that the selection should be based on the
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' individual interest or the capability to work with the corresponding modules.
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should concern
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their desired
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. On the one hand,
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faced numerous issues over the selection of
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when they have to select all the
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provided by the authorities.
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, the lack of interest can be a severe problem for
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to learn continuously throughout the year/ or a semester, so no intrinsic motivation will be added to their studies, but only they hate the
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.
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unfortunately
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the
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might be fed up their entire
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life because of involving with
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activities which were
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by him/her. So, I
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thoroughly
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disagree
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the fact, that concentrating
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all the
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by
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.
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, pupils will appreciate
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lot if they get the chance to do the
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which they were well talented or which they are more willing to do. The chances of generating new ideas/ new innovations (even inventions) are higher if youngers follow what they
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interested in.
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, parents do not need to worry about children's education because
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the motivation is already planted in the
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mindset
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mind set
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mindset
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.
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Nicole
Tesla, the famous inventor of Direct Current based electricity, continuously be with his interests simultaneously assisting
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his master, Thomas
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Alva
Edison.
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he became
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in the subject, electrical engineering.
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, I highly agree with the statement, that
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shoud
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should
focused
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what they
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are interested
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In conclusion, absorbing hateful
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continuously in the
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fed up
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' entire
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life,
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however
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the opposite in the sense of giving the
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opportunity
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select
the suitable subject as
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' choice will empower the student mindset with new ideas and it will help to deliver
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educative generation to the society, concentrating on what desires or talented is having
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a great opportunity
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over choosing the
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just provided by the
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educational system.
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