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Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But others believe that teenage should focus on the subject that they are best at or that they find the most interest. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #teenagers #school #subjects #focus #interest
The
subjects
 need to learn in the schools are debatable. Some of the population have an idea that the youngers within the age 13-19 years old need to focus on each and every subject deliver in the
school
, while others thought that the selection should be based on the
students
' individual interest or the capability to work with the corresponding modules.
This
 essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail and provide evidence as to why the
students
 should concern
on
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 their desired
subjects
. On the one hand,
students
 faced numerous issues over the selection of
subjects
 when they have to select all the
subjects
 provided by the authorities.
Firstly
, the lack of interest can be a severe problem for
students
 to learn continuously throughout the year/ or a semester, so no intrinsic motivation will be added to their studies, but only they hate the
subjects
.
Further
,
unfortunately
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 the
students
 might be fed up their entire
school
 life because of involving with
an
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activities which were
hate
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 by him/her. So, I
throughly
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thoroughly
through
 disagree
to
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with
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 the fact, that concentrating
to
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on
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 all the
subjects
 by
students
.
On the other hand
, pupils will appreciate
a
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lot if they get the chance to do the
subjects
 which they were well talented or which they are more willing to do. The chances of generating new ideas/ new innovations (even inventions) are higher if youngers follow what they
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are mostly
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mostly
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 interested in.
Also
, parents do not need to worry about children's education because
of
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the motivation is already planted in the
students
'
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mindset
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mind set
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mindset
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.
For example
,
Nicoly
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Nicole
 Tesla, the famous inventor of Direct Current based electricity, continuously be with his interests simultaneously assisting
to
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his master, Thomas
Alwa
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Alva
 Edison.
Eventually
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 he became
genius
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 in the subject, electrical engineering.
Therefore
, I highly agree with the statement, that
students
shoud
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should
 focused
to
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on
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 what they
interested
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are interested
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.
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in.
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 In conclusion, absorbing hateful
subjects
 continuously in the
school
 fed up
students
' entire
school
 life,
however
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 the opposite in the sense of giving the
opportuinity
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opportunity
 to
slect
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select
 the suitable subject as
students
' choice will empower the student mindset with new ideas and it will help to deliver
a
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 educative generation to the society, concentrating on what desires or talented is having
a great opportunities
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a great opportunity
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 over choosing the
subjects
 just provided by the
school
 educational system.
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