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In most successful companies, some people think that communication between employers and workers is the most important factor. Other people say that other factors are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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To be called a successful
company
, many views need to be well organized and handled
such
 as the brand and reputation strategy, the sales strategy, the retention rate of employees, and so on. The chiefs have to consider precisely what should be done to get achievement towards the
company
's goal. But what is the most important factor to make a
company
success
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? Many people believe that the
vision
 of a
company
 is one of the key factors for
the
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successful
organizations
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. Not only the directions and goals but
company
 strategies have to align with the
vision
 as well. If there is not a clear
vision
, the organizations will possibly lose the trust of their investors. Other than that, the unclear
vision
also
 affects
to
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the way how workers work. It is hard to define the target to complete for operations.
As a result
, it may lead to
a
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low performance and can cause
the
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organisational disruption.
On the other hand
,
communication
 is another important method. Without
a
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good
communication
 between leaders and their employees, the operation might not be able to reflect a good result. Better
communication
 helps to build a strong connection between colleagues which leads to good collaboration in the team.
In addition
, people don't struggle when they have been well communicated and delegated from the supervisor or manager what needs to be accomplished.
Although
 they're facing challenges, the team can deliver their best performance and generate high benefits return to the
company
. To summarize, I believe
communication
 takes a critical role to accomplish a
company
's achievement. Even the best
vision
 of executives has been posted, the organization cannot be successful without good execution and collaboration.
Thus
, leaders have to communicate effectively with their staff.
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