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In some parts of the world, the rate of divorce has increased dramatically over the past few decades. Explain some possible reasons for this problem and suggest some solutions.

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The number of
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 cases has risen significantly over the past years. Obviously, several reasons lay behind
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 I'm going to explain in detail two of them and give some possible solutions. The
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 reason that may have caused an increase in the
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 rate is the social and psychological devolution that our society has faced after the
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 world war. What I mean is that people are less and less devoted to building solid and tight relationships to the extent that even something once reckoned as unbreakable now is considered temporary. For ,
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 I can see everyday couples yelling at each other without trying to find a solution. Another reason is the emancipation that fortunately women all over the world have experienced after the sixties. In fact, women as wives have gained far more
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, so that now they don't stand any more aggressive behaviour by their husbands or a subordinated relationship as well.
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, my grandmother was far more reluctant than my mother to establish herself in front of my grandfather. Considering these reasons I personally think that in order to slow down or even invert the
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, men should be more supportive and respectful of their partners, ensuring more modernity and parity in the qqrapport. In conclusion, the
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 rate is increasing worldwide due to the evolution of social relationships and women emancipation.
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, people and governments should take actions to tackle
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