Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

It is generally known that securing a preferred

job

for

job

-seekers is quite challenging in

this

competitive labour market. The question

whether

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obtain

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a tertiary

education

or having

experience

and soft

skills

,

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is the best approach for finding

a

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desired

job

for

applicants

is controversial among individuals. In

this

essay, both methods’ arguments and reasons will be enlightened.

To begin

with, the advocates of a tertiary

education

might argue that gaining an advanced

education

is the prime key for securing a high -profile jobs for

applicants

. To be more clear,

a profound theoretical

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profound theoretical knowledge

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knowledge

is

the

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foundation for

further

career

prospect

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prospects

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in many

white collar

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jobs

such

as medicine or law. Because the process of obtaining a deep

knowledge

in these spheres requires for reasonably longer period which itself is impossible to absorb all theoretical

knowledge

during training courses. A good example of

this

is

doctor

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whose qualification demands a huge range of

knowledge

in many both Clinical and Basic subjects like Anatomy, Physiology, Surgery or Therapy which are really critical for checking up, diagnosing and treating

people

.

Similarly

, the law authority employees

also

should have

an adequate

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knowledge

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Law as the lives of

people

are totally

depend

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on their honest decision.

Therefore

, many

people

believe that for

further

career progression, university

education

is fundamental.

Conversely

, the individuals who are favour of

experience

and soft

skills

,

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might consider that they are important for quickly finding a

job

in some fields

such

as advertising, marketing or sales.

In other words

, the requirements of

these kind

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of jobs are mostly soft

skills

like communication, interaction, decision-making,

organisations

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organisation

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, teamwork, critical thinking or active listening

skills

. For the

further

development of these

skills

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,skills

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applicants

need more

experience

in these fields.

For example

, in

advertising

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industry without persuasive ability or creativity

skills

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it is hard to attract customers’ attention for increasing sales.

Thus

, some individuals’ notion for finding a

job

successfully, is to have adequate

experience

and soft

skills

. In conclusion, while some

people

advocate the importance of

an

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advanced

education

, others emphasize the priority of obtained

experience

and soft

skills

to succeed in having

a

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desired

job

.

However

, I suppose that

job

applicants

with both university

education

and

experience

with soft

skills

would be more successful not only in securing a preferred

job

but

also

in

further

career progression as well as they would become asset workers for the companies and organisations.