Pie charts shows the electricity production in France and Australia in 1980 and 2000.
The pie charts visualize the
units
of electricity
generation in Australia and France by using different kinds of fuels between 1980 and 2000.
Overall
, it had been noticed that, in both the
years, Australia had Correct article usage
apply
depends
on coal asWrong verb form
depended
themain
source of Correct your spelling
the main
electricity
production
. On the contrary
, France was using all the available sources of fuels at the beginning but
, Correct word choice
apply
when
years later they started to Correct word choice
but
depends
on nuclear Wrong verb form
depend
power
as their main root for
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of
electricity
production
.
First of all, in both the
countries the total Correct article usage
apply
electricity
production
had increased significantly. To elaborate, in Australia during 1980 the total production
of electricity
was 100 units
. In
that, 50% was produced by using coal. At the same time, the remaining half had been generated by using natural gas, Change preposition
Of
hydro
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hydropower
power
and oil. Furthermore
, in the year 2000, Correct article usage
a totally
totally
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total
170
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of 170
units
were generated, in that, more than three fourth were
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apply
depended
on coal and the remaining Replace the word
dependent
one fourth
of the total Add a hyphen
one-fourth
units
were generated with the help of hydro
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hydropower
power
, natural gas and oil. In addition
, the noticeable thing is they were not used
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have not used
the
nuclear Correct article usage
a
power
source.Submitted by divyahemakumar2017 on
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