Pie charts shows the electricity production in France and Australia in 1980 and 2000.

The pie charts visualize the
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of
electricity
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generation in Australia and France by using different kinds of fuels between 1980 and 2000.
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, it had been noticed that, in both
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years, Australia had
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on coal as
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the main
source of
electricity
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production
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.
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, France was using all the available sources of fuels at the beginning
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,
when
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years later they started to
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on nuclear
power
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as their main root
for
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electricity
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production
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. First of all, in both
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countries the total
electricity
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production
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had increased significantly. To elaborate, in Australia during 1980 the total
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of
electricity
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was 100
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.
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that, 50% was produced by using coal. At the same time, the remaining half had been generated by using natural gas,
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hydropower
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power
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and oil.
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, in the year 2000,
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totally
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170
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units
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were generated, in that, more than three fourth
were
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depended
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on coal and the remaining
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of the total
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were generated with the help of
hydro
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hydropower
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power
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, natural gas and oil.
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, the noticeable thing is they
were not used
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the
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nuclear
power
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source.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words units, electricity, production, power with synonyms.
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