Pie charts shows the electricity production in France and Australia in 1980 and 2000.

The pie charts visualize the
units
of
electricity
generation in Australia and France by using different kinds of fuels between 1980 and 2000. Overall, it had been noticed that, in both the years, Australia had
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on coal as
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of
electricity
production
.
On the contrary
, France was using all the available sources of fuels at the beginning but, when years later they started to depends on nuclear
power
as their main root for
electricity
production
.
First
of all, in both the countries the total
electricity
production
had increased significantly. To elaborate, in Australia during 1980 the total
production
of
electricity
was 100
units
. In that, 50% was produced by using coal. At the same time, the remaining half had been generated by using natural gas,
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power
and oil.
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, in the year 2000,
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units
were generated, in that, more than three fourth were depended on coal and the remaining
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of the total
units
were generated with the help of
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hydropower

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power
, natural gas and oil.
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, the noticeable thing is they
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the nuclear
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